[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Kdots

    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1067
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 967

       I just sat down and wrote... I've not checked it for mistakes nor rhyme.
    I'm just really disappointed in friends becoming idiots...
    and the ones I trust ... well enough said.
    I'm sick of hurting.......

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I never meant to hate you
    with the darkness of eyes born of torment you held me
    and pleaded for your safety.

    Known but to a few you said,
    known by no-one who mattered till this day
    and cared for by the depth of self and no more

    I never meant to want you
    nor open an organ used too much over time
    and let your warmth inside.

    Still care persists below the disappointment
    worming it's way beyond the defensive calm
    opening it's cracks where you should never be
    nor never should have known

    At last though, I have judged you
    have seen inside and known your self
    have witnessed all you hid 'neath honour
    and smelt the cardinal sin from whence
    your own desires reclaimed

    from where your true self,
    your bitterness
    your selfishness
    your emotions, all were named...

    Submitted on 2006-07-12 09:57:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      this is scathing...
    im very glad it is not aimed at me...
    VERY glad...

    im sorry you are hurt so much as to have to write something as powerful as this but from personal experience i know that true pain makes for the best poetry... i wish it didnt but it does...

    i never meant...
    theres a lot of things in here you never meant to do but matters of the heart are never meant... they just happen...
    i never meant to hate you infers that there was love there first... on some level or other...
    some of the ideas conveyed in this write make the love sound very intimate too... seeing a lot of the other person and them seeing a lot of you that isnt normally shown to many people at all...
    i guess it makes the hurt even stronger and the hate even worse...
    i really am sorry...

    the purity of hurt and anger in this piece comes through... i wouldnt tell you to change a thing even if i could...

    take care of you...
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    To written by SavedDragon
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    This written by Chelebel
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Giving written by jjd
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]