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    dots Submission Name: Kdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 990
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 967



    Description:
       I just sat down and wrote... I've not checked it for mistakes nor rhyme.
    I'm just really disappointed in friends becoming idiots...
    and the ones I trust ... well enough said.
    I'm sick of hurting.......


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    dotsKdots
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    I never meant to hate you
    with the darkness of eyes born of torment you held me
    and pleaded for your safety.

    Known but to a few you said,
    known by no-one who mattered till this day
    and cared for by the depth of self and no more

    I never meant to want you
    nor open an organ used too much over time
    and let your warmth inside.

    Still care persists below the disappointment
    worming it's way beyond the defensive calm
    opening it's cracks where you should never be
    nor never should have known

    At last though, I have judged you
    have seen inside and known your self
    have witnessed all you hid 'neath honour
    and smelt the cardinal sin from whence
    your own desires reclaimed

    from where your true self,
    your bitterness
    your selfishness
    your emotions, all were named...




    Submitted on 2006-07-12 09:57:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is scathing...
    im very glad it is not aimed at me...
    VERY glad...

    im sorry you are hurt so much as to have to write something as powerful as this but from personal experience i know that true pain makes for the best poetry... i wish it didnt but it does...

    i never meant...
    theres a lot of things in here you never meant to do but matters of the heart are never meant... they just happen...
    i never meant to hate you infers that there was love there first... on some level or other...
    some of the ideas conveyed in this write make the love sound very intimate too... seeing a lot of the other person and them seeing a lot of you that isnt normally shown to many people at all...
    i guess it makes the hurt even stronger and the hate even worse...
    i really am sorry...

    the purity of hurt and anger in this piece comes through... i wouldnt tell you to change a thing even if i could...

    take care of you...
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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