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    dots Submission Name: the avatar contiueddots

    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 382
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The figure got closer and Riku had to act. He couldn’t let anything happen to an innocent child or its life bound mother. He put the shopping bags down and ran towards the figure. While he was running his eye went catlike again. He got close enough to kick him a fair distance away. The figure went flying and was sent further than expected.
    The figure got up and Riku yet so far could only see his eyes going catlike just like his. He ran for Riku aiming to get past him but failed because Riku had pulled him down from the air and through him to the floor, making the concrete break and the houses nearby shake with rage. The figure got up again and did a summersault over Riku but was knocked back by a thrusting kick that he did over head.
    Time after time the figure kept getting up as reluctant as he was he tried harder than Riku was. After the twentieth time of being knocked to the floor the figure got up and started moving his arms in a small circle near his chest. Then an orange orb appeared there as he fired it towards Riku.
    Then. Pop. Three people in robes stud between Riku, the figure and the orb. They all rose there hands as a blue sea wall rose in front of the orb and stopped it dead. Then they pointed there left forefingers at the figure and he vanished. Then they looked at Riku.
    “Well I must say you put up a great fight for a hum…..” the person said until his and Riku’s eyes connected, both catlike. The three started to circle round Riku amazed at what they had seen. “Your one of us?... How is that even possible?... Come on lets go.” The one that spoke started walking then turned. “Well come on” he commanded. The others went then they disappeared in to the air as travelling fog.

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      I'm so sorry I have to be the one to do this, but you did not spell continued correctly. What this does is makes it look like you just rushed through your work. With that out of the way I must say that you do have a good style of writing, but always proof read your work that's all! LOL!! I know I sound like an insane english teacher who's family life has went to hell and the only control he has is over his students! hahahahahaha!! Just a joke!
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
      draconus, i can proofread em for you, glad we can be m8s again

    c ya soon...

    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]

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