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    dots Submission Name: enough to love youdots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsenough to love youdots
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    i dont feel it anymore
    too much happened so fast
    and it left me almost alone
    and wanting someone who would always just want me
    and there he was
    and here i am with you still mad at me
    for once im not blaming myself
    what should i have done different?
    how could i have loved you more?
    been enough to make it work?

    i dont have any answers because you never gave them
    as revenge for me never telling you what you wanted to hear
    but i couldnt
    words came up and choked me when i tried to tell you everything
    the truths i had hurt too much and the lies wouldnt have been enough

    and i tried so hard for the longest time
    i waited for things to change
    i wrapped myself in hope every night and stared up at the ceiling, just wishing
    and they changed
    cause you left
    and it was me and her
    and now him
    but no you
    not for a long time
    so how could i have been different?
    differenough enough to make it work?

    i wanted to talk to you but when i was ready
    you were done listening
    and when i tried to love you
    you loved someone else and blamed me for everything
    so you cant blame me now




    Submitted on 2006-07-12 11:46:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I actually relate to this deeply, it sounds like the situation I've just gotten over (well I'm still getting over it). It was very touching and you put real emotion into what you wrote. I enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Eeks, I'm in love with this. Totally in love. I mean seriously, this is great. It certainly conveys the feeling, the regrets, and it sure as hell conveys them well. Man I am just totally speechless. This is like the worst comment ever, but seriously, I really love this.

    the truths i had hurt too much and the lies wouldnt have been enough

    I know exactly what you mean here. Exactly. yeah...

    i wanted to talk to you but when i was ready
    you were done listening
    and when i tried to love you
    you loved someone else and blamed me for everything
    so you cant blame me now


    and this wonderful stanza! Wonderful! For awhile, this was my greatest fear, when the relationship I was in hit a hard time. Yeah, this poem is pretty much awesome. To the favorites list it goes. Again, sorry this is the worst comment ever.
    | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]


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