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Black and Yellow Butterfly

Author: James Reyna
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Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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I was outside and saw a beautiful "Black and Yellow Butterfly" outside and usually on my part of town we don't see alot so I was inspired to write this poem.

Black and Yellow Butterfly

Black and yellow butterfly
Here at my door
And While soon I know you must leave
You must come by a little more
You always create beauty,
Where none can be found
From the barren poor streets
To the tragedies downtown
But goodbye for now
You must leave, spread your living joy
Leaving memories of how
I chased you as a boy.

Submitted on 2006-07-12 15:53:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  James I really enjoyed the childlike quality of this piece and there are so many opportunities gifted to us in nature which can stir our soul and bring us back to those days of chasing dreams as butterflies!
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| Posted on 2007-08-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Pure simplicity...I love it! Not only was this sweet, it was about one of my favorite things on the planet! I LOVE butterflies!!!!! This was so innocent and gave those who read it, time to stop and smell the flowers. Very nice moment that you captured here and reflected on at the same time!

| Posted on 2006-10-13 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  This was great to read. And it's also great that you were able to come up with this while seeing it in person. I myself love butterflies (Although up close they don't look so pretty)

I really liked the last line a lot. "leaving memories of how, I chased you as a boy" That made me smile. It reminded me of my little sister, who used to chase them. She had a net and she'd run around the yard. Now she's not to fond of them anymore.

| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  good poem. it really shows how even in the worse places beauty can be found in the smallest package. good job for portraying that
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by lover_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
  awww this is a short and sweet poem, linking back to your past and childhood, and how it may have changed? It could have a few different meanings, but its a good poem that quietly observes the beauty of nature
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by Musicloverxx | [ Reply to This ]
  i definitely like this more than the other pieces i've read from you. here your rhyme scheme is staggered at a more effective pace, and the similarity in the amount of syllabes and overall length of each line helps to strengthen the continuity and flow of the poem. therefore, since i enjoyed simply reading it more, i have a much better feel for whats going on in the poem.
| Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by ozymandias | [ Reply to This ]
  "Well Jim, this was the kind of poem that leaves one feeling good about the world (for a change) in which we dwell. It was somewhat nostalgic to me as it reminded me of my youth, and who amongst us hasn't chases a butterfly or two. There is always beuty in the world if we take time to look. Obviously you did and wrote about it well.---Keep it up dude---Mugs---
| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice, man. It's good to see someone stopping to notice the little beautiful things in life every once and a while. A nice read indeed.

With love,
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  I <3 this. Sweet and Simple. No ah i want to die, whish is what the past...idk how many poems I've read have been. So reading this was quite refreshing! Nice write!
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  this was so beautiful how u put the the message that even in the darkest parts of life there is always beauty no matter how small it may apear good job hun i really enjoyed something that didnt involve suicide...even if that is what i basicly write lol

all the love

| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
As it has been stated before. This is a nice homage to the simpler things in life. Not everyone takes the time to appreciate these wonders that are all around us.
This has a nice simple rhyme scheme. Easy to read and follow. Very upbeat and the reader does get to see the butterfly through your eyes. I think it is nice when you can picture what the writer is talking about.
Well done. And as always, thanks for sharring.
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by Man in Black | [ Reply to This ]
  I realy enjoyed this one. It's nice to here a guy who can openly admit to enjoying the delecacy of nature. Stay who you are!!

| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by wildflower | [ Reply to This ]

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