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Only if You Knew...


Author: In the Fire...
ASL Info:    30/m/Orlando
Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 46 /121 /63
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Only if You Knew...



If the stars all belonged to me,
you'd have them in your hands.
If i think i can't do something for you,
in my heart i know i can.
If i could rule all the worlds
i'll put them before your feet.
If we are in any case searated,
i'll make sure the ends will meet.
If a butterfly could be kept alive
when placed within a jar,
then you would have the most beautiful ones
that live out of reach, afar.
If the magical powers that i have
could be put within my hands,
i would take them to the farthest beach
and bury them in the sand.
My heart is filled with a powerful love
from you which is pure and true.
Only if you knew, Denise,
the love i have for you...




Submitted on 2006-07-12 18:29:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You make me wish I were her... Lol.

I'm a sucker for love poems.

Pix
| Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by pixie_007 | [ Reply to This ]
  I thinks this must be the most sweetest thing in the entire world! Which just kind of makes you really not care about things like structre, spelling. and all that other stuff. But all of it's good, and If I must be picky I saw one spelling mistake. But I absolutely love this! What a lucky girl.
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i like this, especailly comming from a guy this couldnt sound sweeter. your what or your saying what any girl would love to hear.

anyways back to the poem. i loved it . it flowed and you used proper words strong words not just simple ones. anaywas good write i loved it!

xox
| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
  wow when i read this hun i got the damn chills its an amazing write i cant believe it. you only had a few spelling errors but im the worlds worst speller lol but really hun this is amazing i love it thank you for sharing this with the world she is a lucky woman to have touched such an amazing poets heart.

all the love
nikki

*kisses*
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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