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    dots Submission Name: tsunamidots
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    Author: kjb
    ASL Info:    23/male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 256/351/64
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 738
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    Bytes: 847



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       drugs are bad.


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    dotstsunamidots
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    drool hangs like an icicle
    from the corner of his mouth
    he feels his stomach go numb
    can't see through the blur of his salt incrusted tears
    blackout.
    breath.
    hurts.
    his head spins to a merry-go-round
    he wants it to come to hault
    he wants to be
    thrusted off the carousel
    it tourments.
    give in.
    vomit.
    streams of bile
    unruly chunks
    the cement like a Pollock
    visions haunting
    tsunamis.
    volcanoes.
    dying hope.
    in the name of fun
    in the name of teen angst
    in the name of self-abuse
    how long can he hold out
    till it...
    breaks him.
    he bows.
    gives up.





    Submitted on 2006-07-13 22:38:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this flow a lot. it reminds me of someone jerking in and out of conciousness, which i definitely think works well with the subject matter of the poem. i also liked how you described elements of the poem, it seemed you were thinking originally. It wasn't cliché, and i appreciate that in a poem about despair. great write.
    laura
    | Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by etheariac | [ Reply to This ]


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