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This is about a girl in highschool who was never noticed. This is very far from being like me. I just thought it was good lol
She walks down the school hall
Nobody seems to notice her at all
She has very few friends
And noone to hang out with when the day ends
Not a soul wants to talk to her
And she is all alone
Often she sits and thinks by the water
That is infront of her home
What did she do to be shunned like this?
And why was she always ignored?
Would she ever get her first kiss?
And if she ever got a boyfriend, would he be bored?
All these negative thoughts ran through her head
That's when she made the decision to end her life
Now miss nobody is dead
She ended her life because of this internal strife
Before she did this horrible deed
She left behind a note
For all to read
On the folded paper it said: "will I get noticed now that I'm dead?"
Submitted on 2006-07-13 22:48:11
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