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    dots Submission Name: Miss Nobodydots
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    Author: Rachela
    ASL Info:    16/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/0/4
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 570
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    Description:
       This is about a girl in highschool who was never noticed. This is very far from being like me. I just thought it was good lol


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    dotsMiss Nobodydots
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    She walks down the school hall
    Nobody seems to notice her at all
    She has very few friends
    And noone to hang out with when the day ends

    Not a soul wants to talk to her
    And she is all alone
    Often she sits and thinks by the water
    That is infront of her home

    What did she do to be shunned like this?
    And why was she always ignored?
    Would she ever get her first kiss?
    And if she ever got a boyfriend, would he be bored?

    All these negative thoughts ran through her head
    That's when she made the decision to end her life
    Now miss nobody is dead
    She ended her life because of this internal strife

    Before she did this horrible deed
    She left behind a note
    For all to read
    On the folded paper it said: "will I get noticed now that I'm dead?"




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