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    dots Submission Name: Instant message emotionsdots
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    Author: Anchiale
    ASL Info:    32/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 88/73/14
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1883
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 609



    Description:
       Something I wrote for a friend after losing a bet about the Lakers vs. Spurs game, so dont take this one too seriously, lol.


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    dotsInstant message emotionsdots
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    Although I've never met you,
    cant even imagine your face,
    you've taken my affection,
    inside me you hold a special place.
    I'm not sure where you are now,
    don't care where you have been...
    The only thing I'm sure of is,
    I want to be your everything.
    My words fall smooth to paper,
    (can't tell you to your face,)
    but I'd like to let you know now,
    you possess power over me with things you do and say....
    give me reason to look forward to another day
    just to hear you say...
    Hey!




    Submitted on 2004-05-16 15:43:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can't help BUT take this seriously. This reminds me of what I'm going through (kind of?!) so its going in my favs list! Its a great write, my fav lines were:

    My words fall smooth to paper
    (I can't tell you to your face)

    I can relate sooo well and the first line is so well written. Again, great work!!
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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