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    dots Submission Name: Department of Missing Youdots
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    Author: FarawayFeelings
    ASL Info:    16/F/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 159/74/72
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       At first I thought I needed to add to ti, but I guess I really don't. Hope you like it!

    >Ac/Cable *VACANCY* Thoughts Welcome.<


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    dotsDepartment of Missing Youdots
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    "MISSING: Two Eyes of A Caring Brown"

    Said the poster on the light pole in front of my bulding, not is af anyone knew where those eyes were but me. Should I have been more specific?

    The city is cold today,
    the taxis don't pass,
    so I walked to work,
    The streets are almost empty,
    strange in such a big city.

    I hadn't met those eyes, in I'm not sure how long, only that it had been too long. I hadn't met those eyes, and not because they hadn't met me. Sometimes when those eyes had been near they would linger over me, like storm clouds...




    Submitted on 2006-07-14 09:42:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. That was haunting. And I use that word sparingly. The last stanza was great, it brought the poem together. I loved it, but I love all your work.

    -Guernica
    | Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by Guernica | [ Reply to This ]
      it was a bit hard to understand but the true meaning of it is a good one its smooth in its approach you looking for eyes that havent met you i can find a story in that right there ...its like you put a whole poem into one metaphor searching for him wanting to look into them again ...its hard moving on from anything esepcially when you havent had a chance to feel i loved this girl once upon a time and we was good friends so our eys met time and time again you know but i was so scared of her denyhing me and losing everything i had with her her eyes never met mine in the way i wanted so nothing became of her so if you still have the chance to meet those eyes please do cause the regret i feel today is not worth it so thiks is an original write and definitle somehting to read over again
    | Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]


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