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    dots Submission Name: Ode to a past boyfriend who won't be nameddots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOde to a past boyfriend who won't be nameddots
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    people make mistakes
    so mistakes is true
    how many do i gotta make
    2 understand you
    the reason why you left
    the reason why i stayed
    the reason that my mind
    is so fucked up today
    rapping my soul
    with you lying and cheating
    i stopped believing
    and u stopped decieving
    i'm supposed to be strong
    yet you made me weak
    so i'm making this ode 2 u
    or so to speak
    i'm not dissing u
    i'm just inlisting u
    so you can understand
    how under pressure i stayed true
    no i know young love is overrated
    so missused i hate it
    but with this new guiy i can't abused
    just know you fucked it up 4 u.




    Submitted on 2006-07-14 18:54:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      k, so I just finished writing a poem almost the same basic gist of it all. So naturally I know what it feels like. I liked the poem, it moves well, and it tells how you feel. poems don't always have to use metaphors. and sometimes it's nice to just be blunt. Nice job :)

    "Emily Martin"
    | Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by invisiblerose | [ Reply to This ]
      ok, so the beginning started out kinda general, ina great and philosophic way, and then at the end you got really personal (which I have to admit made me feel a lil uncomfortable), that is just my take. Well done, sounds like it felt good to you to get this out... keep writing! shalini bridges
    | Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      this is pretty good....the way you rhymed the words made me think of how I would do it...I thought that was kinda cool
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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