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Ode to a past boyfriend who won't be named

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 120
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Ode to a past boyfriend who won't be named

people make mistakes
so mistakes is true
how many do i gotta make
2 understand you
the reason why you left
the reason why i stayed
the reason that my mind
is so fucked up today
rapping my soul
with you lying and cheating
i stopped believing
and u stopped decieving
i'm supposed to be strong
yet you made me weak
so i'm making this ode 2 u
or so to speak
i'm not dissing u
i'm just inlisting u
so you can understand
how under pressure i stayed true
no i know young love is overrated
so missused i hate it
but with this new guiy i can't abused
just know you fucked it up 4 u.

Submitted on 2006-07-14 18:54:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  k, so I just finished writing a poem almost the same basic gist of it all. So naturally I know what it feels like. I liked the poem, it moves well, and it tells how you feel. poems don't always have to use metaphors. and sometimes it's nice to just be blunt. Nice job :)

"Emily Martin"
| Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by invisiblerose | [ Reply to This ]
  ok, so the beginning started out kinda general, ina great and philosophic way, and then at the end you got really personal (which I have to admit made me feel a lil uncomfortable), that is just my take. Well done, sounds like it felt good to you to get this out... keep writing! shalini bridges
| Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
  this is pretty good....the way you rhymed the words made me think of how I would do it...I thought that was kinda cool
| Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]

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