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    dots Submission Name: The whitest sheet of paper listensdots
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    Author: Superman
    ASL Info:    21 Lady
    Elite Ratio:    7.37 - 695/377/71
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1385
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1232



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    dotsThe whitest sheet of paper listensdots
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    You are paper child:
    you are white, you are delicate,
    you come in one shade,
    on one ream of paper.
    That is how you were put here,
    and that is how you will leave.

    Fear not of your ink stains, son
    we have written out your future-
    kept it in the borders of the blue lines.
    You are quite the piece of paper son,
    dont let anyone tell you otherwise.

    You were made with the finest ink, you know?
    Ink that flew from the pen of a stock broker,
    a lawyer, a doctor.
    You are no blue collar worker,
    you are a man of fine clothes and gold watches,
    you are a man made of riches.

    You are to be raised in a gold building
    with a lead door so no one may see you.
    I tell you befriend the man with the cigar
    but do not fear him,
    do not anger him or he may one day burn you.
    Do as I say son, as I've learned from my father.

    stay in your borders, marry any woman you wish-
    you want
    and life will bring you treasure
    beyond your wildest desire,
    and it is desire that keeps the hunger growing
    so my son, do not eat too much.




    Submitted on 2006-07-14 21:48:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this peice. It's wierd and eclectic, and that's exactly how poetry should be. Poetry I like anyway. The punctuation could have been worked on a little bit, and the line structure was very free verse, and that's good to a point, but some structure is nice in a poem of this length. I do like this peice very much, but the technical aspect of it keeps me from favoriting it.
    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-07-14 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. I am not sure why it doesn't have but one comment. I added it to my favs as well. I like the fact that you personify the paper, and everything is vailed behind a curtain. It is nice to have a poem that is not so straight foward. Good job!
    LeAnna <')))><
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]


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