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    dots Submission Name: Society Sucks in 189 wordsdots
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    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1056
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    dotsSociety Sucks in 189 wordsdots
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    physically tired,
    mentally bored,
    totally alert,

    head hurting,
    brain twisting,
    totally confused,
    fucking headache!!!

    feelings floating,
    emotions growing,
    anger rising,
    judgemental pricks,
    scornful looks,
    biggoted stares,
    hateful words,
    to make up for small dicks,

    freak they say,
    sexual deviant,
    unlike the others,
    eccentric miscreant,
    afraid they say,
    what fear?
    what fear?

    worse person than they,
    or so they say,
    as they close their minds,
    and run away,
    from anything that might,
    open their eyes,
    reveal the truth,
    disband the lies,

    ignorance is bliss...
    they must be ecstatic,
    to be so sheltered,
    unknowing of the world,
    blind to life,
    with strings of pearls,
    dental floss razors,
    tooth-paste poison,
    perhaps this time we'll start,
    where we're supposed to end,
    and once at beginning,
    begin again,
    working our way through,
    straight back to the end,

    closed minds open,
    blind eyes see,
    deaf ears listen,
    tied tongues free,
    spoken word,
    reason or rhyme,
    with proper meter,
    and correct time,
    to savour life,
    free from constraints,
    drawing with words,
    heard by sinners and saints,
    remembered dreams,
    forgotten lies,
    remembered feelings,
    forgotten cries,
    remembered love,
    forgotten hate,
    a gift from above,
    with fresh clean slate.....




    Submitted on 2006-07-14 23:30:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i felt that, every [censored] word... masterfully written. raw, full of angst and a glimmer of hope. it what i signed on for... thankyou.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]


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