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    dots Submission Name: Deleriumdots
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    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Prose/Dark
    Total Views: 1150
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1307



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    dotsDeleriumdots
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    Her head bounced so beautifully off the old glass mirror, once, twice, SMASH
    Seven-thousand shards of glass lie on the floor,
    Puddles of crimson vitae beg forgiveness for their escape,
    Glistening on the floor as they run in tiny rivulets through the floor-board,

    drip...drip....
    I can hear the drops falling through down...down...down onto the dirt floor of the cellar...

    drip...drip........drip....

    god it won't stop, the same sound over and over...
    how many pints of blood can the human body possibly have?

    christ it's everywhere.... on the wall, in the frame of the mirror, on the sink, the toilet, the tub, my clothes, the rug, the ceiling, my hair

    fuck it's all over me.....

    drip.....drip.....drip

    that fucking noise...... what the fuck is that noise.....
    drip...drip...drip...drip...drip...drip...drip

    Stop dripping!!!!!!!!!!!!! fuck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    drip..drip..drip..drip..drip..drip..drip..drip..drip

    like a clock ticking and clicking and dripping and booming....

    BOOM....BOOM....BOOM....BOOM.......

    it's getting louder....

    BANG......




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