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    dots Submission Name: Meowdots
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    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsMeowdots
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    I meow softly, yet you sit there grasping at straws through a paper-cup view of the world, I meow loudly and you smile pet me gently and rub my ears and then shiver when I purr, I meow pethetically and you take me into your arms and caress me and tell me it's ok because the food will be here soon, I meow savagely and you spread your flower open for me to scent and taste the gentle dew on your petals, I meow dominantly and you kneel before me begging of me another soft and blissful caress, I meow roughly and you tremble at the power masked behind such a simple verse, I meow contentedly and you pull me closer to kiss me and show me the fruits of my actions, I meow seductively and you fall under my spell left trembling at my ability to supercede society, I meow softly and you go back to grasping from straws through a paper-cup, and so I mew softly and we dance the dance of blissful ignorance upon smoke-clouds of exhaled reason.

    meow.

    09-02-04




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      Hm... I like it... I feel that this is a really powerful beginning, and you have the potential to make a really powerful statement here... it depends on wher eyou want to take it, but I think the repetitive, circle-of-life notion... well... I think you can do better than that :P It has strong themes of control and power and what you do with it, you could make something out of this ^.^ ~Cora
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      if i knew you once would you have meowed. if i knew you again would you meow? if i never know you but by what you read, what then?
    this piece promotes intrigue. and wonder. curiosity has planted its sapling...
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]


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