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    dots Submission Name: Raindrops and keyholesdots
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    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1062
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsRaindrops and keyholesdots
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    The raindrops fell on my head as I stepped outside,
    Reminding me of a time when my feelings I'd hide,
    Secret from all aside those in the place,
    Reserved for the closest and dearest of friends.

    My mind wanders back slowly as it oft' seems to do,
    The memories of laughter and sweet thoughts of you,
    Then I open my eyes, feel the rain in my hair,
    I laugh and say to the world,

    These opinions I share,
    I open my heart for the world to see,
    That these things I've written,
    Have been a part of me,
    The dreams and the dances,
    The screams and the tears,
    All from my heart I share,
    Taking the chance,
    That you might reject them,
    As foolish nonsense,
    But still I write on,
    My mind more at ease,
    My art a door to my soul,
    The keys to which i now release,
    Into your hands with desperate hope,
    That some of my words might cause need to choke,
    Not choke as in choking but to choke back a tear,
    and next I would hope,
    that some words bring you fear,
    some words bring peace,
    some words bring a smile,
    some words make you think,
    for quite a long while,
    Because this is my artform,
    I share now with you,
    Mayhaps to enlighten,
    The world of my views.

    ~fin~

    M. 3-22-02




    Submitted on 2006-07-14 23:42:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      So your a feline huh? nice write but are you male or female?
    | Posted on 2006-12-09 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... I really, really like this! Can't believe it didn't get comments... I like how there's a change in the speaker, I love poetry that tells a story, or suggests that there's a larger story behind the one it tells. Hm... sometimes, though, I feel like it could be tighter and more artfully worded - but there's no real way to fix that, to make some more 'stylish' or whatever. I don't know, I think... on the same subject, I would have... hm... *is inspired* :P

    yeah, this reminds me of a friend of mine, actually, now I want to write... ~Cora
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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