Hey dopejokes are you like the room host? If so I'd like to make a toast and boast about meeting you and say I appreciate how you been here on multiple dates. Was meeting you in our fates? And youre also from the states. And I hate when I’m out of herb ooo derbo cause I’m out far from the suburbs close to some cheese curds. Now sit back and observe how absurd I can make your mind curve. I think I lost my nerves. So I use new words. In this rhyming phrase. Now the flag will raise for 69 days, cause of the craze you got me in. From the way you sin in front of me. I mean I win. When I get to be within you Lynn. And hey mudd lets sit and drink some gin. And bull shit about us taking a hit of acid Back when we where some kids. Remember when u hid to get rid of the bid you placed on that one car that was very far but by a bar that had that tar. You know that beer bout by that queer monkey that came up funny and to damn funky and I was lucky cause my buddy mudd booted him and wanted to be a stud that’s speech sounded like a dud. Ok I’ll forget when I smoke some bud and pound down this Budweiser. Now monkey returned for a bigger boot. So mud played a toot and he was gone and it is about dawn. So to day I’m cutting the lawn and gona ask Dawn. To be gone. So I’ll treat her like a fawn, and not shoot her eye cause I would try, but it went right by. So she doesn’t die. No I won’t lie. I am high. But I still can rhyme. And I think I get fine in do time. But my mind is behind most of yall. Because I took a hard fall it was 40 foot tall and by an outlet mall that I stole from and my friend got fired in the end so 100 bux I had to lend to send her out to Chicago. And no she wasn’t a hoe. But now is my foe. Cause I changed. I was in a cage and got full of rage, and I wasn’t on a stage. Then I answer your page. On my new cell phone. That’s ringer will Mohan out a nice town.
| lol this was pretty damn funny. nice rhyming. keep it up||| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Solitary Blue | [ Reply to This ] || very quick and interesting.|
these are lyrics right? i could think of a million different types of music to put this to, what have you done with it?
the only change i would make would be to edit the format. When everything is so crushed together it leads to people giving up on your piece and ignoring it.
i havent seen any of your other posts yet, but if they are in a similar format, you might want to think about changing them.
ill check out some of your other works and would appriciate any feedback youd have on my own works.
|| Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by blahblahgurl | [ Reply to This ] || wow. you're a topic jumper aren't ya? i liked it though. very interesting topics you chose.. keep writin|
|| Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ] |