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Author: mcgovern_xiii
ASL Info:    35/M/NewEngland
Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 70 /91 /26
Words: 38
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I accept the challenge and this is my attempt at not writing in the first person.


Of hollow and curved
eroded stone.

Only time has truly known.

These river front properties
to be theirs alone.

No matter what man
Shall claim them his own.


Submitted on 2004-05-16 18:50:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hmmm... i dunno. i dont feel like this really got anywhere. these phrases by themselves were fine, but together...they didn't really flow for me. perhaps i'll come back and look over it again later.
| Posted on 2004-05-16 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]

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