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Waiting for the 6

Author: LadyMerlina
ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58
Words: 39
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Waiting for the bus.

Waiting for the 6

Waiting for the 6
Going to work, stoned again
And stil.
Yet trembling inside my spine and chest
Take a deep breath, sit back and rest
Still waiting for the 6.
(stoned again)

Submitted on 2006-07-15 15:57:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Not sure what to make of this. I like it, I jut don't quite understand it. Myabe you should explore this further, perhaps?

Anyway, interesting work.


| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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