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    dots Submission Name: brotherly lovedots
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    Author: young p
    ASL Info:    14/m/N.O.La
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 29/31/11
    Words: 358
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 645
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2078



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       just me and my brother trying to keep this rap shit as lyrical as possible


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    dotsbrotherly lovedots
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    (young p)
    Yo itís Young P blazing the track
    Iím crazy, Iím back from the psychiatric ward just to lodge a knife in your back
    Face it youíre whack
    Your rhyme style is copied like you Xeroxed the facts
    Flow so hot that Iím melting the wax
    Losing my sympathy for others the more selfish I act
    Iím a dope boy but I ainít talking about selling em crack
    My rhymes are so blue but I always make sure to pen them in black

    (unknown soldier)
    Iím one of the illest kids to ever hop on the mic
    I disregard traffic signals while yíall always stop at the light
    Step in the ring for the chance to box with the Blight
    Lyrical pimp, these metaphors can knock up your wife
    Sick of tranquility, Iím about to stock up on strife
    You rhyming is a waste of time like cutting through a lock with a knife
    A couple of sales is what you got through this hype
    Live on the page, so now Iím trying to blot out my life

    (young p)
    My flow is like a river, thereís no stopping the flow
    Fast or slow
    I can show you my shine and let you bask in the glow
    Drawing energy from the light of the sun
    Going to battle until the fight has been won
    Put your seat belts on since the flight has begun
    You should know the consequences if you strike at your son
    Cuz once he gets grown those who fucked up his life will be shunned

    (unknown soldier)
    Real rapís population is quickly decreasing
    The FBIís missing and hip hop criminals are strictly policing
    Black mothers with their sons missing, theyíre weeping
    Your spouse is anotherís secret lover and you caught her kissing and creeping
    My girlís leaving so Iím a try to visit on weekends
    But the pool of love is bottomless and I donít wanna drown on the deep end
    How did I lose the faith that the rest of the world is so avidly keeping
    Lost in dreams til I awake while the planet is sleeping





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