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Don't ask


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I've never cut myself. But I know people who have. And a few of those people were very close to me and they still are very close.
It's the worst feeling in the world to know that they have to do that to feel better. I wish I knew how to help...


Don't ask



I am just a girl
with a horrible life
and as I stand here crying
while holding this knife
I slide it down my arm
digging in deep
it's the only way
I'll be able to sleep
I'm tired of crying
I'm tired of screaming
sometimes I think
that I am dreaming
but I have to realize
this is not a dream
and everything
is as it seems
so in my failure
I begin to bask
I don't know why I'm like this
so just don't ask




Submitted on 2006-07-15 22:11:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was written very well. It flowed amazingly, and the rhyme was great. I can relate, I've was there not long ago, so I can offer some advice. Don't look at the dark side of life peek into the better side. I know at times it may seem that there isn't one, but there is. You just have to search for it. Great write. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading.

Always,
XE.L.M.X
| Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by heartofxwinterx | [ Reply to This ]


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