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    dots Submission Name: sad shitdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 735
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    Description:
       UI guess this reflects how I been feelin lately...since I came to illinois I aint been a site to behold, you know?...


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    dotssad shitdots
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    like a cloud over my head, so I can't think straight/
    I think I"m better off dead, with suicide mind state/
    I'll rate my state of conciousness, I'm living in a dream/
    might as well be in a coma, or stay asleep cause it seems/
    that I fucked up in my life, lost the one thing that mattered/
    but now since I ain't got it, I aint even wanna have have it/
    but. I'm still empty inside/
    ready to fuck somebody up, but yo' I'm scared so I hide/
    not afraid of what will happen when I do what I do/
    but I'm afraid that when I do it, I'ma do it to you/
    on the other hand though I almost want to/
    I aint afraid to go to jail, cause when I do this I"m through/




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