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    dots Submission Name: Forgive me....dots
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    Author: Jill Lynne
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 77/92/23
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1362
    Average Vote:    1.0000
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       I get pissed at people that say that they love me and then fuck me over so I write these kind of poems to vent....


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    dotsForgive me....dots
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    Forgive me for the selfishness
    I know that emanates,

    Forgive me for my lack of understanding
    About this whole debate,

    Forgive me for my honesty
    And how I bring it forth,

    I know i'm harsh
    I know I cut
    As reality will pour....

    Forgive my unforgiving nature
    For the strength
    With which I stand,

    Forgive me as I turn around
    As your words
    All turn to sand,

    Among the living
    I walk and breathe
    A beat off
    And out of tune-

    Wearily compensating
    Here and there
    For always
    The lack of you-

    So forgive me when your merry life
    Is almost more than I can bare,
    When my carnal urge
    Is to rip and bleed and tear,
    All that dye job
    Out of your hair,
    As I hear you scream unfair....

    And forgive me in my absence,
    I know it's so sorely missed....
    But most of all forgive me
    As I bare my ass to kiss.





    Submitted on 2006-07-16 00:53:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love it when you choose to get the crap off your chest and tell someone where to stick it. This was forceful yet borderline amusing...at least to this reader who is always looking for pieces with some damned substance to them. There is so much pap on this site that I am overjoyed when I find someone who can actually write with intelligence. I am officially a fan!
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, i kind of chuckled at the last line. what i want to know, is why you are saying sorry when your description makes it seem like someone elses mistake!
    muchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]


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