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    dots Submission Name: Apple Piedots

    Author: PastelSky
    ASL Info:    18/F/In the clouds
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 181/223/49
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       ....I was very angry at the time :D.

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    dotsApple Piedots

    Crackling Deceptive Engraging Inverno

    Crackle Crackle Crackle

    hate hate hate

    Stay away from my heart
    --the apple in my bossom--
    Treacherous Worm, rankling Snake!

    C h e w i n g...its way into my secrets
    C h e w i n g...its way into my world

    Easy now--easy.
    My chambers are quite dense.

    Bite Bite Bite

    hate hate hate

    So what did you find,
    my little pet?
    my goddamned devil,

    am I your filthy little Eve?

    Leak it all to me
    and tell Adam,
    tell GOD
    What you took from me
    and what secrets I hide

    release it to the world
    for all I goddamn care--
    chomp your way
    through my seething

    What's this?

    No response,

    and no BITING?

    CRAP--my blood
    killed the snake!!

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