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    dots Submission Name: Thindots
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    Author: GreyWater
    ASL Info:    18/ f/ co
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 19/7/3
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 733
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1080



    Description:
       Anorexia and starvation diets are a real
    problem for most of America, the majority
    of victims being teen girls.
    So can anyone relate to my poem?


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    dotsThindots
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    Starve until your stomach bleeds, until
    your legs are picks with knees, until
    the pain comes with ease.
    Jog two hours every day, until you feel
    like wasting away, until your face turns
    a nasty gray.
    Stretch like you've never stretched before,
    twist yourself all over the floor,
    until you can't take it anymore.
    Exercise your body untl you don't have a
    body left,
    until you think and feel you can't
    accept.
    Pray every night someone can help you,
    make you stop what you do,
    make you see the given truth.
    Why must the pain come this way,
    every single day?
    Look at the faces of family,
    ask yourself why can't they see.
    The agony of truth lies just behind the
    haunted surface of your eyes,
    along with the memory of all your
    hate and lies.
    Why can't someone just realize?




    Submitted on 2006-07-16 09:59:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write is a little anorexic, don't you think... lol J/K.

    Very good write. Anorexia is a pain in the ass. What's with Hollywood leading the freaking charge? IT IS NOT A FREAKING TURN-ON! A lot of female actresses that I enjoyed seeing, I no longer care to see. It's so pathetic.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by EseanB | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem, it's great!! I ask simmilar questions, people are so absesed with making their bodies as thin as possible, they don't even realize that some thimes that's not the best look for them, and is completely unnesessary.
    Anyway the poem flows well, and you worded everything great! I love it :)
    Great job,

    Alexandra
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liek this poem. i think almost everyone can relate to this...feeling fat and going to the extremes about it. good job!
    | Posted on 2006-09-05 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow.. that really makes ya think don't it? i think it's pretty good... maybe in guilt some people will realize how bad it is eh?. hmm
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem keep it up!!

    <3 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]


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