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    dots Submission Name: Sucked in a time warpdots
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    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       Children of the 80's were we- whats it now- like 2000 or something....?


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    dotsSucked in a time warpdots
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    Nothing more to learn here
    and nothing more to gain
    I cant capture a moment
    when nothing stays the same.

    I got sucked in a time warp-
    enjoyed playing with my past-
    I'd really like to stay here-
    but this world moves so fast.

    I'll no longer ask of him-
    things I want him to tell:
    foolishly trying to recapture
    the grace from which we fell.

    Who he might be today
    I'm sure I can never know-
    so I gather all my strength
    as I prepare to let him go.

    Did I ever know him?
    He's now fading away;
    fond moments in my memory
    time will take him away.





    Submitted on 2006-07-16 10:26:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well written. <Applause>

    Two verses stuck me as exceptionally worth remembering:

    I cant capture a moment
    when nothing stays the same.

    and

    fond moments in my memory
    time will take him away.

    To me, this poem is about realising that one is indulging in the past, recognising it, cherishing it but also having the courage to let go. it's about having the wisdom to see that if you don't (let go), time will change those capsules of the past as well.

    thank you for posting this.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]


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