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    dots Submission Name: Blossomdots
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    Author: Jeniffer
    ASL Info:    18/f/earth
    Elite Ratio:    5.88 - 235/260/72
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 246
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Lately I've been coming up with entire poems just when I'm trying to fall asleep at night; throughout the day little 'flashes and specks', as Walt Whitman would say, come to me, but they don't fit together. Then, they all come in a an avalanche of verses, all at once, in a few minutes, at that time when you're laying in bed and letting thoughts drift in a and out.
    You know what I mean. This is one of those poems. I have another one that came to me in such a fashion that needs work and I'll probably post later.


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    You started out in a flurry of dreams-
    blinded to thorns by sweet petals;

    Now the days are shorter,
    and the cold wind is clearing your head;
    you are still young, so young,
    but now you are learning how to live,
    recognizing the time for tears that matter,
    making room for laughter,
    and all the while, you are growing,
    all the while you are realizing
    that you are not a flower,
    but a tree,
    not delicate, but strong,
    not slender, but wide and tall,
    with many branches sprouting leaves
    and many layers growing as you go about each day.

    And just when you thought you were over
    all the silliness that was once such rumination,
    the absurd fears and laughable romances,
    one crush you didn't know was still there
    makes way for another you didn't see coming,
    and summer begins all over again.




    Submitted on 2006-07-16 15:31:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i thik that this describes adolecence perfectly. i mean, i am really too grown up for my age, from everything i have lived through, but i do remeber when i was a little younger, all those sorts of feelings.well done relaying growing up to somethign else that grows. good comparison.

    perhaps bring "but a tree" in with "not a flower" just to keep the flow going. it ight look odd, but that is how it should be read, i think.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem and what it's saying (or isn't). I can't give you a big comment as i'm short on time so i'll come back to this when i can, later in the day but, i liked the last line alot---i don't know, it just brings the whole poem together and really anything that alludes to 'summer' is something that i like. Not summer as summer but as something else. For me it's time, and more time, and solitude, and so on but i like the way you put that last line (and the whole poem) in sort of spoken word like voice-over. And i'd imagine if the last line was read outloud it would be pleasant and the words would sound as if the speaker were seeing an old friend for the first time.

    -jon
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Dr.Strangelove | [ Reply to This ]



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