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She is gone


Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 73
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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I hope this isn't what I'm going to be like in the future. I'm a bit depressed right now, but I hope I never turn to drugs and alcohol to fix my problems.
But anyways, this is about death and loss. A common theme in my poetry.


She is gone



She made my pain disappear
now the only thing that does that
is this bottle
she was my shoulder to cry on
now the only thing I cry on
is this pillow
she was my best friend
now my only best friend
is this bottle of pills
She was always there
now the only thing that is here
is the deadly silence
that I have to listen to
every damn day





Submitted on 2006-07-16 19:23:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ok this is a very powerful peice. its sad yet final also i really love how short it is yet can carry so much emotion. i really like this one its diffrent from what i read of yours before. i hope it all works out even though what i hope really wont change anything. but i still can.

all the love
nikki

*kisses*
| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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