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    dots Submission Name: What You Make Me Feeldots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1079
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 601



    Description:
       Well, I sort of felt this way about a guy in school.


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    dotsWhat You Make Me Feeldots
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    You see me
    yet, I go by.
    You know me
    yet, I just hide.

    You know I care for you
    but you don't say a word.
    My friends say you do too,
    it's hard to say for real.

    You sit by me
    and give me that smile.
    How can I resist you?
    I guess it's my heart
    that calls for you.

    I don't want to
    feel this way.
    If it means
    falling at your feet.
    I'm not that
    type of girl.
    I don't give myself away
    that easily.




    Submitted on 2006-07-16 21:59:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great poem! really conveys good emotion but i think it ends really abruptly. it flows really well and then its like it just drops off.... i just felt like it needed some closure. all in all, i really liked tho.

    ~Shadia
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by Shadia Dark | [ Reply to This ]
       I can relate to this poem only because i have a friend who likes me but hates to see me because he can't flirt and I get butterflys in my stomach and I cry and I flirt somewhat.


    Jessica

    p.s this is a good one going to make it a fav.
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by jslbabygirl101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. In a way it kinda reminded me of myself... like how I guess I don't want to fall "head over heels" just by a flattering word or a nice smile... hmm.. I don't know if I had wrote that if I would have done anything differently.. .but eh I liked the phrase "I'm not that type of girl" it brought out separation... individuality... =]
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]
      like yeah poem ma seem like im the person you talking bout i use to be just like that but liked it keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ghetto_King | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. Its amazing cause all my 9th grade year i felt this way towards this guy. And i hurd so many things he liked me to. But he never askd me out. It hurt me alot after it but i moved on and now we are best friends and before when i liked him i could barely talk to him now i tell him everything lol.
    keep this up i like it alot.

    <3 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked this one....in a way i can relate! so good job!

    Brittany
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]


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