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What You Make Me Feel

Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Well, I sort of felt this way about a guy in school.

What You Make Me Feel

You see me
yet, I go by.
You know me
yet, I just hide.

You know I care for you
but you don't say a word.
My friends say you do too,
it's hard to say for real.

You sit by me
and give me that smile.
How can I resist you?
I guess it's my heart
that calls for you.

I don't want to
feel this way.
If it means
falling at your feet.
I'm not that
type of girl.
I don't give myself away
that easily.

Submitted on 2006-07-16 21:59:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  great poem! really conveys good emotion but i think it ends really abruptly. it flows really well and then its like it just drops off.... i just felt like it needed some closure. all in all, i really liked tho.

| Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by Shadia Dark | [ Reply to This ]
   I can relate to this poem only because i have a friend who likes me but hates to see me because he can't flirt and I get butterflys in my stomach and I cry and I flirt somewhat.


p.s this is a good one going to make it a fav.
| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by jslbabygirl101 | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it. In a way it kinda reminded me of myself... like how I guess I don't want to fall "head over heels" just by a flattering word or a nice smile... hmm.. I don't know if I had wrote that if I would have done anything differently.. .but eh I liked the phrase "I'm not that type of girl" it brought out separation... individuality... =]
| Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]
  like yeah poem ma seem like im the person you talking bout i use to be just like that but liked it keep writing
| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ghetto_King | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this poem. Its amazing cause all my 9th grade year i felt this way towards this guy. And i hurd so many things he liked me to. But he never askd me out. It hurt me alot after it but i moved on and now we are best friends and before when i liked him i could barely talk to him now i tell him everything lol.
keep this up i like it alot.

<3 Brittaney-Mae
| Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this a way i can relate! so good job!

| Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]

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