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    dots Submission Name: A New Begginingdots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    21/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 204/316/119
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1706



    Description:
       in some of my previous work i had a series of poems that went together, i called it my DAMNNATION SERIES. if you want to truly understand this poem go and read THE VOICE, HAUNTED, DAMNATION, THE RETURN, and THE FINAL OUTCOME. for those who have read them i hope you enjoy this piece just as much.


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    dotsA New Begginingdots
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    (intro)
    Do it...
    do it i say...
    kill all that make you who you are,
    do it...

    (poem)

    a child wipes his hands clean,
    and smiles at the blood stream,
    scared eyes with tears,
    he killed all that he feared,

    with the slash of a knife,
    he took his mothers life,
    damned her to hell,
    to make himself well,

    there you go kid,
    do you feel better,
    look at what you did,
    you got blood on your sweater,

    why did i have to do this,
    all she wanted was a kiss,
    why do you resign in me?
    why wont you leave me be?

    tell me are you strong?
    i don't think you are boy,
    what do you think is wrong?
    i think she was rather coy,

    no she was my mother,
    she was just another!
    another what you fucker?
    just like his dear old brother...

    who's brother do you speak of?
    and why did you kill one i love?
    ONE YOU LOVE YOU SAY!
    I DON'T THINK IT WAS THAT WAY!

    i found her quite creul,
    so i made her blood drewl,
    her methods of love so fake,
    hitting you for her mistake,

    giving birth to one such as you,
    i said i'll kill her,
    and thats what i'll do,
    so i took care of her for sure,

    now wipe those tears from your face,
    you don't want to be a disgrace,
    for we're not done yet... not at all,
    there is still one yet to fall...

    and just who might that be?
    oh ho oh... just you wait and see...




    Submitted on 2006-07-16 22:00:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sweet! oh wow! so many questions! who is this new boy? how did the voice get him? who are they gonna kill? where did the first guy go? ahh!! i must now go and read the next! i'm so excited now! wow, i have a lot to catch up on, i can't believe i let myself be idle for so long!

    more later,
    Misty
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem, it's kind of creepy though lol. I could definitely picture everything happening, it was really easy to follow. It kind of put me in the mind of the Childs Play movies. It's an innocent child turned into a cold blodded killer. This is a different style piece, I have to admit it's the first of it's kind I've ever read. You have great writting skills, I hope to eventually read more from you! Great job :).

    ~Cris
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]



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