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    dots Submission Name: Cries of The free-willeddots

    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsCries of The free-willeddots

    ladies and gentlemen of society,
    I've called you here so you may see,
    the finality of the travesty,
    of a mockery we call democracy,
    democracy presumes a choice for the people,
    a government seperate from the church's steeple,
    but what we have here is a world they wanted,
    while like rabid dogs the nayesayers are hunted,
    Tell them they're wrong, go ahead if you dare,
    but they won't listen and really don't care,
    they'll keep on doing what they do,
    putting money in their pocket while we get screwed,
    all in the name of the one true god,
    god? what about seperation of church and state,
    It never has been or ever will be that way,
    we're all doomed to answer to the lord of the keep,
    for not following along with the path of the sheep,
    they say we're given free will, it's up to us how to use it,
    but if we do something wrong, then we'll certainly loose it,
    what happened to loving your fellow man,
    yet having the right to against wrong's stand,
    The rights we're "given" are placations at best,
    to keep us complacently not passing the test,
    and they tell us in spite of the fact that we're free,
    we'll never be anything unless we become property,
    we trade in our hours for a handful of dimes,
    over and over again, too many times.
    all so our president can sit back and do lines,
    and get his pockets fat off of money from fines,
    that's bullshit, I'm tired, and sick of their shit,
    they want me to give up but I'll never quit,
    not until someone takes heed to my words,
    and points out the stupidity and the absurd,
    and when that happens maybe we'll all awaken,
    and take up arms to take back what they've taken.



    Submitted on 2006-07-17 10:20:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very well stated. I think a few parts here and there the rhyming seemed forced, but the majority of it carried quite a good flow.

    I enjoyed the fourth line though as it states one of the major problems with democracy that is supposed to be the best thing about it. Too many choices and opinions and interrpretations about anything and everything always leaves in its wake anything and everything.

    Clever write.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Some well choice words that I think even Adam Smith would agree with...seeing his ideals become such a shame.

    very thought provoking indeed,

    | Posted on 2006-09-04 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]

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