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    dots Submission Name: Longing For Youdots
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    Author: imaginaryqueen
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 301
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    I hear your voice resonating through the empty walls of my soul…
    I see your face shining through the vastness of my mind…
    I see your shattered picture so clear in the pieces of my broken heart…
    I feel your look like those tender loving kisses we once shared…
    I can’t escape these emotions that choke me to tears…
    I can’t hide from this pain that is killing me inside…
    Each day brings back memories I wish I could erase…
    I just wish you’d understand…
    Just how much you meant to me…
    I just wish you could’ve seen just how happy we could’ve been…
    But I guess destiny is my enemy and loneliness is my best friend…
    Because everyday I sit contemplating and thinking about you…
    How it would feel to have had you…
    Not just to wish for your sweet words once more…
    But I guess you’re long-gone now and I’m left all alone…
    Wishing you’d come back to bring back light to this lonely, dark heart…
    That only wished to push back time and remedy this situation…
    Cause day by day I feel myself falling and there’s no one to pick me up…
    Everyday is like a nightmare without my prince charming to rescue me…
    My mind tells me to forget you…
    But my heart tells me to look for you…
    Even if I looked for you, you’ve changed so much…
    You’re not the one I learned to love…
    You’ve become a stranger to me; someone I never knew…
    But in spite of everything, I don’t hate you…
    As unusual as it may seem…
    I just hope one day maybe we could be happy again…
    But until that day I’ll sit alone yearning for you more and more…
    As each day slowly withers me away…




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      This poem is really deep and thats what I LOVE about it. I also can relate to how you feel some of my poems are like that. I love the line -**I see your shattered picture so clear in the pieces of my broken heart…-**. I love the first 3 lines matter of fact. As far as improvement goes you could add a couple of personal memories, I'm going to start working on a poem like that. I hope you understand what I'm saying. lol
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by YeaILoveHim416 | [ Reply to This ]


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