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    dots Submission Name: Haikudots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/
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       Hi there! just a little japanese poem i have made up for your pleasure or not...hi hi ha ha ho ho...whatcha think???
    can you haiku???


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    dotsHaikudots
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    the mist spreads it's arms
    encompassing the ocean
    two forms become one




    Submitted on 2006-07-17 14:09:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      heavy one form, air

    response to a haiku
    leocrates
    | Posted on 2010-02-02 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the image because it's really vivid and kind of eerie (probably because of the mist), but I think haiku are supposed to be "complete," and since ellipses indicate omission or a trailing off, I'm not sure you'd use one at the end of a haiku. You have a wee typo in encompassing.

    I hope all is well,
    Amy

    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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