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    dots Submission Name: Ocean Bluedots
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    Author: DaRaven
    ASL Info:    25 Male Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 28/58/42
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOcean Bluedots
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    Lookin through the ocean as I step on the sand I see my reflection.
    Amazed at how far I have come, I see im far from perfection.
    I have travelled so far to see you again…
    to remind me that out here I do have a friend.
    Always bringing a smile to my face….
    So I travelled far to this distant place.
    And here I found a place to run…
    to bask in the sun and have some fun.
    To stray away from the fast paced life…
    To wake up to this beautiful light
    And there is where I find my friend…
    once again...




    Submitted on 2006-07-17 14:12:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It sounds beautiful. The landscape descriptions are so euphoric and the imagery is very vivid. The colors are almost tangible and the emotional element in it is like spice. I can see longing here, a search maybe for something or someone. Excellent.
    | Posted on 2006-12-04 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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