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    dots Submission Name: I Amdots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 290
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1116
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1598



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    dotsI Amdots
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    they call me prodigy in bubble letters on pavement
    i made waves in cyberspace and shook parking lots fullaí cavemen
    i gave them thumbs and made them raise them
    in appreciation for the ages that i worked filling these pages
    i made men by blazing them, thats how fuckin famous i am
    i got more shine than most gems
    and i am,
    i am
    the southeastís finest finally
    im in the East and got the whole city behind me
    its easily the biggest undertaken ever mistaken for possible
    to try to top my list
    its not happening kid
    iím flipping hip-hop like sampling did
    when the ampís broke and the weed smoke clears
    iíll still be here

    yes
    iíll be moaning my vocals over break beats
    when im old and crusty
    talking about the old days and how nobody trusts me
    sitting on the porch, giving kids the good eye
    like how back in the golden years,
    i stared down the mic stand, i shoulda died on stage
    i like being the hype man, but height is relative
    when you stand next to a giant,
    you comtemplate the advantage a ladder might give
    a bit of spit can corrode a soul
    and no control can put an emcee in comatose
    so,
    i lasso the assholes together in bundles
    gather some sticks and burn em in the gutters for gossip
    im talking cheap heat,
    putting my fam in the nose bleed seats
    i am the reason why vegeans donít eat meat
    and only the good hooks repeat




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      u and ur weird ass rapping. i saw this [censored] in the forum and i was like "damn, that's hot". u rap like a [censored] guerilla soldier with a [censored] brain tumor...just to let u know. we both know this is going on my fave list. oh yeah...i love the description
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