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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots

    Author: whendt
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 902/387/108
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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       Just a peace I wanted to share

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    some people have a half self life of 30 years
    life can be cruel and short
    live it to the fullest or you may regret it

    love come in many shapes and colors
    a dog may love you
    a child may love you
    take what you can get and be happy

    don't be cruel to animals or the old
    you may come back as a dog
    and everyone gets old
    live like a child
    carefree and without boundries

    enjoy the colors of life
    winter,summer, rain and snow
    let your eyes take lots of pictures
    your mind will store them all

    don't smoke!
    Drink only in celebration
    take time to smell the roses
    enjoy life to the fullest

    Make as many friends as possiable
    you will need them in times of trial
    friends last a life time
    and they stick with you through thick and thin

    And in the end hopefully you end up with the one you love
    and as you look back on your life you will have no regrets?

    Submitted on 2006-07-17 17:34:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is a wounderful poem. It is one of my favorites and i have nothing to complain about in it!!! It was great. Keep up your good work. I will add it to one of my favorites.

    Brianne H.
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by skittls | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poem brings up a love for living,
    a feeling of being excepted. ( even if it is only from a animal. My cat is my best friend some days.) The message that you give is wonderful. If only everyone would try to live life to the fullest..then perhaps the world would be a happoer place. A good thinking piece.

    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, and again i agree with charmedidentity i think that this poem could be explored more.

    This poew reminded me alot of Everybody is Free

    I really like this, I am definately going to add it to my favourites

    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you Irina ! Your words about this poem were right . I could of done it one better but this is what came to mind. I like it this way. Thanks for readinding it!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Kelley,

    What a wonderful interpretation on love. I must confess, i haven't written a thing on love these past few months and yet i have so much of that in my life with all the people who surround me.

    There a different types of love and i'm glad you highlighted that with the love of a dog or a child..There were others you could have mentioned but i guess those were the first ones that came to mind. I had one dog in my life...It loved everybody but we had to find her some new owners because everytime she saw laundry whether it was the neighbours or ours...it ended up being dragged on the floor...By then end of six months, we were out of clothes. But still, that dog loved us.

    I would debate the entire issue about friends...There is a saying that you can count your true friends on one hand and i believe in that...i had so many friends in my life and in times of trouble, the ones i could really count on were the ones i could have counted on my one hand. So i would debate that.

    Other than that, although i enjoyed the topic you have chosen and the thoughts that you have taken, maybe you should go beyond the definition of love...To me, this feels like a surface that could be digged up and found more precious stones. I don't know, i feel you have so much more to say about this. Just a gut feeling though...No biggy.

    There were a few words you have mis-spelled like cruel and regrets. But it's only a minor error, we do that all the time.

    Hope we talk soon again. This is a very nice write...It kinda cheered me up.
    Take care...
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]

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