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    dots Submission Name: countdowndots

    Author: whispered_chaos
    ASL Info:    15/f./cincinnati ohio
    Elite Ratio:    6.8 - 151/94/48
    Words: 368
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    scissored hair brushes her face
    and climbs to the clouds above her
    twisting like roots beneath her feet
    tripping, the thoughtless pagans' meet,
    stalked by vengefulness, rivers cried sweet.
    ruby waves crash on the glass shards
    that paint the beach's mournful hues
    and slipping beneath the hollow ground
    playing tunes and melodies, a shreiking sound
    that travels where it will never be found.
    blood on sparkling silver blades
    stand out against the whiteness of heaven,
    taking scarred pictures out of their frames.
    playing terrorizing games
    with the children without names.
    fleeing into light from the nightmare,
    a woman cries for her child's caress
    but he lies bleeding in the glass
    someone came and killed his ass,
    tomorrow is the funeral mass.
    harsh words play against the clock-
    tire the hunted from winning the game,
    restless legs search the night
    but never stop for unstable fright,
    mocking you as you struggle to fight.
    clinging to her mother's shoulder
    a little one cries the night away
    finding playgrounds to make her kill
    nobody dares to fight her will,
    she never looks back and time stands still.
    broken wastelands flat against the sky,
    antagonizing protestors with angry strife
    and finding the hollow sounds inside
    a mother with her child to hide
    the storms will come and travesties collide.
    clawing, the angry mobs all run
    at the door with full on force,
    they scream and shout, "avenge the ripper"
    someone yells out"your daughter's a stripper"
    the young men of town all rush to tip her.
    smuggling demons past the ports
    the boats collapse and sink below,
    crippling the sailors beneath the water,
    trembling in fear, what have they taught her?
    goddess won't heed their whorish daughter.
    stifled murmurs from below the waves
    creatures plead their master for mercy,
    warble incessantly like urchins from the lake,
    they corrupt the vices, nothing's at stake
    there's only petty lives left to take.
    seven zombies cry without feeling,
    six cats cling to the ceiling,
    five tongues find girls' mouths appealing,
    four terrorists are doing fate dealing,
    three people corrupt without healing,
    two do the scalping, living skin peeling,
    one by one, our lives they are stealing.

    Submitted on 2006-07-17 18:06:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this a lot there's so much in it i don't really know what to say except keep on believing in the futility of life it works for you
    | Posted on 2007-02-22 00:00:00 | by necromance | [ Reply to This ]
      I still dont know how you do it..but keep at it cuz its brilliant!
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Northern_light | [ Reply to This ]

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