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    dots Submission Name: ** Closed Doorsdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Sorry
    Total Views: 1125
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 337



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    dots** Closed Doorsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Opened
    Up
    To
    A
    New
    World
    Glorious
    Amazing
    And
    Awesome
    To
    Bad
    The
    Door
    To
    My
    Old
    Ways
    Has
    Already
    Closed
    Behind
    Me
    And
    Has
    Left
    You
    Behind.




    Submitted on 2006-07-17 18:08:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I enjoyed this. Interesting and well done. The only thing I see that might make it read a little better might be to take out the words "behind me" after "close". Ya know? Tried reading it without them and it seemed a bit better.

    Good job.


    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      i thought this poem says alot of things but mostly how u left someone behind and werent able to see them anymore or somehting of that sort, im not good at leaving comments so im just gonna say one thing, keep writing, "always think positively"


    -Nick-
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Opened
    Up
    To
    A
    New
    []
    Glorious[,]
    Amazing
    And
    Awesome
    [World]


    I don't know. I didn't really like the flow and format of this, but if you really want to keep it then I'd make a few ammendments as shown above. Even the wording got a little confusing and it took several reads to get what you were trying to say. This could be made better with revision.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Opened
    Up
    To
    A
    New
    []
    Glorious[,]
    Amazing
    And
    Awesome
    [World]


    I don't know. I didn't really like the flow and format of this, but if you really want to keep it then I'd make a few ammendments as shown above. Even the wording got a little confusing and it took several reads to get what you were trying to say. This could be made better with revision.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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