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    dots Submission Name: Near The Enddots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1137
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 333



    Description:
       Just wrote it, with jumbbled thoughts of someone. Not sure if it makes sense, or it's any good. I just wrote it.


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    dotsNear The Enddots
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    Make me forget
    the time I spent with you.
    It's not that
    I don't want to,
    love you anymore.
    It's the end
    I fear.
    When you get
    tired of me.
    What will I do?
    You'll just watch
    my tears fall.
    And my heart,
    for you, call.




    Submitted on 2006-07-17 22:23:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      try to smooth things out a bit more, i understand where you are comming from though
    | Posted on 2011-02-16 00:00:00 | by littlemisskitte | [ Reply to This ]
      short a bit to short but short.could relate though
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one...i can totally relate! good job!

    Brittany
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is pretty good, In parts it seemed a little choppy and nonflowing . I still enjoyed reading it.

    R.Bayden
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]


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