Near The End by Foreseer

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Submission Name: Near The End dots

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Author:	Foreseer
ASL Info:	20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:	2.73 - 156/86/23
Words:	53

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	1137
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	333

Description:
Just wrote it, with jumbbled thoughts of someone. Not sure if it makes sense, or it's any good. I just wrote it.

Near The End dots

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Make me forget
the time I spent with you.
It's not that
I don't want to,
love you anymore.
It's the end
I fear.
When you get
tired of me.
What will I do?
You'll just watch
my tears fall.
And my heart,
for you, call.

Submitted on 2006-07-17 22:23:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  try to smooth things out a bit more, i understand where you are comming from though
| Posted on 2011-02-16 00:00:00 | by littlemisskitte | [ Reply to This ]
  short a bit to short but short.could relate though
| Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one...i can totally relate! good job!

Brittany
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is pretty good, In parts it seemed a little choppy and nonflowing . I still enjoyed reading it.

R.Bayden
| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.