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Near The End


Author: Foreseer
ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156 /86 /23
Words: 53
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just wrote it, with jumbbled thoughts of someone. Not sure if it makes sense, or it's any good. I just wrote it.


Near The End



Make me forget
the time I spent with you.
It's not that
I don't want to,
love you anymore.
It's the end
I fear.
When you get
tired of me.
What will I do?
You'll just watch
my tears fall.
And my heart,
for you, call.




Submitted on 2006-07-17 22:23:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  try to smooth things out a bit more, i understand where you are comming from though
| Posted on 2011-02-16 00:00:00 | by littlemisskitte | [ Reply to This ]
  short a bit to short but short.could relate though
| Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this one...i can totally relate! good job!

Brittany
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is pretty good, In parts it seemed a little choppy and nonflowing . I still enjoyed reading it.

R.Bayden
| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]


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