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    dots Submission Name: Educationdots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       The down side of teaching elementary school...


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    dotsEducationdots
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    They all said if we’d learn to read
    New worlds would open up.
    They said that once we cracked the code,
    We’d overflow the cup.

    And so we studied tirelessly–
    We put the clues together
    Memorized the phonics rules
    Knew sounds for every letter.

    They were absolutely right –
    Locked doors flew open wide.
    Foreign lands and people grew
    In spades before our eyes.

    The secrets of biology,
    Of chemistry and hist’ry,
    Now they all belonged to us –
    Fading fast was mystery.

    We learned of wars and famines,
    Of greed and acts of hate,
    Incurable diseases,
    And governmental waste.

    Our teachers would be glad to know
    How well we’ve comprehended
    That reading's made us all grown up –
    Our innocence suspended.

    But we forgot to stop for sobbing
    Or perhaps were never taught
    To let the words remake our selves -
    Mere knowing’s not enough.











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      nicely done here. sometimes ignorance is bliss, eh? anyway, you do great job here. my only nit is with 'Our innocence suspended' - it's more like innocence destroyed. i think you need somethinga lot stronger than 'suspended' - i lreaize you need it for the rhyme but it doesn't have the necessary impact for me. other than that minor thing, excellent work!

    peace,

    joe
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written, wasn't sure what to expect when I saw the title, but well done! I very much enjoyed this, and sadly yes this is true. My aunt used to teach elementry in California (now teaches teachers, not sure what thats called) but she would say how sad it is, how much these kids she'd teach would do just for some attention. Because their perents always worked, or didn't care, just the extent they'd go, just for a little attention, alittle praise, it's a shame that perents don't really sit down and spend time like they used to, to teach their kids right from wrong, to teach them what to do in situations, how to treat people, and that they are loved. Sadly not all things can be tought in schools, and it cannot be helped. But this is our sad reality. (sorry if I completely missed the point, this is what I got of it) very very good write.

    -Bella Ombra
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Dark Muse | [ Reply to This ]
      They all said if we’d learn to read
    New worlds would open up.
    They said that once we cracked the code,
    We’d overflow the cup.

    And so we studied tirelessly–
    We put the clues together
    Memorized the phonics rules
    Knew sounds for every letter.

    They were absolutely right –
    Locked doors flew open wide.
    Foreign lands and people grew
    In spades before our eyes.

    The secrets of biology,
    Of chemistry and hist’ry,
    Now they all belonged to us –
    Fading fast was mystery.

    We learned of wars and famines,
    Of greed and acts of hate,
    Incurable diseases,
    And governmental waste.

    Our teachers would be glad to know
    How well we’ve comprehended
    That reading's made us all grown up –
    Our innocence has ended.


    So, you've been channeling William Blake's "Songs of Innocence and Experience?" No? Hmmm...

    If education is defined merely as information with no underlying sense of justice/ moral outrage nor balance found in the pleasures of fine art, literature, poetry, music, dance, etc.; then the dismal view you present is absolutely accurate. The emphasis of media in the 21st century is about as bloody, negative and sensationalistic as it's ever been and the world is a troubled place. Learning to read hasn't killed us, it's simply made it impossible for us to claim ignorance again. Is it possible to reclaim our innocence through the eyes of children? There's a thought.

    Sad, true and well put.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I think facts are only the precursor to great art. Nothing gives us the tension needed to provoke art quite so well as the stuff school and life are made of. Just the facts m'am..

    When all is said and done, we won't remember the facts or need the logic. But the changes it might bring to society might be noted.
    And while the dividing and naming and judging is going on we might just see how ludicrous all of it is.

    Luckliy, I paid no attention while I was at school and I've not regretted it one bit. I sincerely concur with your brilliant estimation and would not change a word!

    Nice, thanks for sharing Annie, now this is message that needs to be sent.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      To learn of the devastation in this world beyond our nicely manicured lawns, our pleasant day-to-day conversations and occasional hiccups in life that happen-- knowledge is power, but certainly, as you said, a precursor to the loss of innocence... or is that ignorance?

    But this is about innocence.

    As a teacher, do you see that look in your students' eyes when they learn the horrible realities that humans have inflicted upon each other and upon this earth? You're often the first contact to educate them, aren't you? What a nasty business for you to have to go through... yet, without it, we'd all be blind and force-fed.

    Tough job you've got Annie.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Ignorance is not bliss, it is powerless. Knowledge is power, to do with as you wish.
    Give a man a fish and he will eat for a day,
    but teach that man to read and to fish,
    and he will sit in a boat drinking beer and reading Playboy.

    You see, it's not the knowledge acquired that is the devil here, but how it is applied. Teachers empower so that knowledge can be gained, but the application of that knowledge comes largely from parents and social pressures. Sure, the weight of the world can be unbearable at times, but ignorant folk do nothing to rectify the situation. As education increases so does the desire for peace. The crime rate declines. Social acceptance rises, and certainly health care improves.

    Your poem touches on many issues regarding education, politics and morality (2 out of three ain't bad). It gives the child's point of view, and leaves us wishing for that sweet innocence of our youth. Do we burden our young at too early of an age, with problems of the world? Maybe. I think perhaps we do, that they get barraged with it with all of the media they can access these days. It certainly ends their "innocence" at a young age.

    Nice poem, fun to read.

    Phil
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]


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