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    dots Submission Name: My Leavedots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1059
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 599



    Description:
       Thoughts jumbbled up, just writing I suppose.


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    dotsMy Leavedots
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    It's time to go
    and say goodbye.
    I'm just looking
    from the outside in.
    Take the time
    and understand.
    You'll know by now,
    the meaning of my departure.
    You've probably heard this,
    it's not you, it's me.
    It really is!
    Do you get it now?
    Why I leave,
    and have you hangin'?
    Why I turn away from you?
    I'm scared, of this,
    of what we have.
    Now is it clear?
    If you don't,
    don't worry.
    There's no one else.




    Submitted on 2006-07-18 00:01:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      sorry to say but this poem sucks. better luck next time.
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by saving_death | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm... this is not a bad poem to me but it doesnt show alot of emotion.. but to me its still good just needs more emotion and feeling i think but yea lol

    <33 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm..... I hate giving bad comments. But I have to agree with the post before. I think that you could do alot better. Try more feeling I dont know lol Its your creation your feelings but Im sure the next will be better.
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by fallen_angl_2 | [ Reply to This ]


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