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    dots Submission Name: LIAR. =/dots
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    Author: fbeat
    ASL Info:    15/female/ca
    Elite Ratio:    1.45 - 4/19/19
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Rant/
    Total Views: 966
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 299



    Description:
       he doesnt mean it.
    he doesnt talk to me anymore.
    not like he used to.
    were losing touch.


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    dotsLIAR. =/dots
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    My walls caved in and I spoke to you today.
    You said you miss my laugh and smile,
    missing memories that last a certain while.
    you'd come and see me anyday,
    if you could.
    im contemplating whether you meant it.
    or you say this because bestfriends should.




    Submitted on 2006-07-18 01:49:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Brilliant.

    Did you perhaps read my mind? Because I was just thinking something along the same lines. Thank you, you just captured the thoughts perfectly. Eloquent and simplistic. I love it.

    Very smooth, very well done.

    -Sennie.
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Drifting Star | [ Reply to This ]


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