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    Author: fbeat
    ASL Info:    15/female/ca
    Elite Ratio:    1.45 - 4/19/19
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 860
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    "i'll be there for you, if you'll be there for me"
    open your own damn eyes, im not there to see.
    for you,
    for me.
    for everything we need.
    you can forget it.
    abandonment.

    junctions stop the traffic.
    guns stop the pain.
    tears start the lying.
    and children go insane.

    from bestfrineds

    to deadfriends

    to dead ends.


    to love and to lies,
    to birthday time and silent drives.
    to postcards, to letters, no replies.
    to wishing wells and hazey skies.

    to the broken heart,

    and every broken beat.

    to lost time.

    to every tear we bring.


    to you.
    to me.
    to something we all need.

    so sit back
    watch the show
    blow my brains out
    watch it flow.
    cannons ready, load it up.
    light the fire.
    this time i say
    enough is enough.
    the gunshot.
    the sound i desire.




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