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    dots Submission Name: Encounterdots

    Author: ares_nuke_1
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 106/151/76
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 820
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    alone with thoughts
    sitting eyes wide mouth open
    did she notice
    will i be caught

    moving silently
    ignoring everything
    everything but her
    she's so stunning

    say hello
    toss her my name
    said with ease
    what a smooth fellow

    she smiles back
    we talk some
    in the end
    we share some laughs

    the night is over
    we must depart
    the moment's short
    but the memory lasts forever

    Submitted on 2006-07-18 04:10:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a cute poem. I kind of pictured a guy maybe in a cafe or a small town bar walking up and making conversation with a girl he saw across the room. It kind of leads me to wonder what happens next, letting your imagination run wild...Thinking "will he/she call him?" "will they ever see one another again?" "was it meant to be?" I'm a hopeless romantic sorry I can't help myself lol. Overall this is a great poem and I enjoyed the read! Good job! :)

    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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