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    dots Submission Name: WHAT DIFFERENCE DOES IT MAKE?dots
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    Author: Ligeia83
    ASL Info:    23/f/the literary world
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 17/14/13
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 127
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    Description:
       a journal entry which became a poem


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    dotsWHAT DIFFERENCE DOES IT MAKE?dots
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    What difference does it make?
    You heard the double-bass play...
    again...
    and what difference does it make?
    and I cannot help but feel jealous
    of you and your good time...
    it shouldn't be so because we are one...
    but still I am...
    You heard the double-bass play...
    how was it?
    How did those low notes affect you?
    What did they say to you?
    Did they talk to you the way they talk to me?
    Did they affect you they way in which they affect me?
    I can't believe it actually happened...
    It's just a smile, only a smile
    and a double-bass playing endless music in my head...
    I need you to save me...






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      GOOD WRITE!! It highlights many aspects of the emotional canvas. The invoking query "What difference does it make?" can be a sign of distress, even indifference, yet the over riding concern here is to inspire intimacy and this feeling of belonging together leads to a plea at the end: "I need you to save me..." I've used these elements of indifference, distress and love to a different effect in my latest poem "WHATEVER!" Do have a look!

    Peace,
    Sohaib Ali.
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by onehappypaki | [ Reply to This ]



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