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    dots Submission Name: Usdots

    Author: sravenlyn
    ASL Info:    17/f/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 21/58/67
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       I am trying to choose between breaking up wit my b/f or staying wit him. Its been good up till now and my worlds feels like its about to end

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    He calls me on Sunday
    And reminds me he is gone
    I wont be happy Monday
    Because me happiness is done
    Thoughts become depressing
    Bringing back all pain
    Watching my emotions undress
    Feeling my soul running in Acid Rain
    I have chosen to be without
    Without the pain your bringing
    I know this is something I'll doubt
    But I cant go on with my body stinging
    As I cry writing this thing
    I think of all the times we had
    Eventhough right now I sting
    I can always addmit times werent bad

    Submitted on 2006-07-18 16:03:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you know thats not a bad write i feel you may be a little blocked from the experience your goin through cuz i can feel a sense of wanting to describe yourself or should i say your feelings but the pain cant be described i been there and am speeking from experience,i feel u,do me a favor and comment on a few of my writes id really appreciate it,no one realy checks them out so i dont know how they are
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    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by thehiddenone | [ Reply to This ]

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