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    dots Submission Name: Kill the Inner Child!dots
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    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 899
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1224



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       I. Have. No. Idea.

    Father Christmas forgot me this year and the back of my Wardrobe was plastic. I came this close to not-believing.


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    dotsKill the Inner Child!dots
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    Once, we had a farm
    and on the Cabbage Fields
    we used to play war with my brother.
    I was always an inferior
    for I could not shout as loud
    as the bombs shout
    – but I could die,
    naturally.

    I’ve never particularly liked the Cabbage Fields

    Nowadays I study biology;
    the human body and anatomy as such
    interest me
    – how does a heart break?
    For just the other day I heard about the Fairytales;
    they’re not true! – and I could hear a crack
    inside me.

    Cinderella was not there after all, saving the Cabbage soldiers

    And now, here and there I go,
    crying my life
    and sleeping badly at nights
    – I watch nightmares, and awake there in between.
    Mostly I give up
    and go watch the TV-Shop
    For the Narcissist in me
    does not tolerate mistakes;

    Peter Pan had a Flying Accident, Jesus was killed before Lunch.

    And therefore I announce:
    “The Kids of the Cabbage Field have fled!”




    Submitted on 2006-07-18 16:50:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey,

    This is very sad to read somehow. I don't really know what to think after reading this...( i hope my mind hasn't gone blank)...lol

    Anyways, you have a strong title. I don't understand why you haven't had any comments yet...It's good for me because i will be the first person to give you a comment but still, this is a good piece that needs the opinion of other people.

    I know your main focus was the cabbage fields...But with all honesty, since i never been to one, i really can't relate to that and i really can't picture it too well...I mean, it's there, i just don't know what to do with it. I do however know a lot about fairytales and that kinda kept me going. At the beginning, i thought you would have talked about santa claus because i found out santa claus didn't exist in a weird way ( i found that out with the wrapper my presents were wrapped in. it was the same wrapper my parents bought at the shop the week before)

    But still, it was a nice piece to read and i did like it a lot.
    Your title was totally amazing...I loved it very much...
    Anyhow, do take care....
    ~irina
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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