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    dots Submission Name: REMEMBERING WAR IN CHANGING REALMSdots
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    Author: azure_warrior
    ASL Info:    42 /m/ in my mind.
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 44/43/32
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       I learned of a book where according to the author, we are on earth to develop our souls RAPIDLY. We go someplace right after death. We review our lives and eventually come back to Earth. Some refuse to go back Earth at all because they feel the suffering on Earth, while it may lead to rapid soul development, is just TOO MUCH.
    No matter what rewards there may be.


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    dotsREMEMBERING WAR IN CHANGING REALMSdots
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    Not somewhere else, but here.
    Desiring ecstacy not complicated,

    But a oneness grand.
    But I remember too much, and so determine to
    protest

    And no matter what anyone may say to defend the
    world,
    I will refuse to return

    I will make that archetypal stand as One.
    Actions speak louder than words.

    Listen. Earth has gone too far.
    To who has the power-Stop the senseless war.




    Submitted on 2006-07-18 18:50:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If that were the case for the life cycle (I'm a Christian, so I'll tend to disagree, but not in a rude way, because... that would be rude), I would certianly not want to revisit this place. It's so corrupt, so full of evil, senseless death, greed driven war--it's madness really. I don't think anything really would be worth coming back here. I'd serve out my time somewhere away from the hate of Earth. We live in such black times...

    I liked the poem a lot, I have no critique for it. But then again, I'm a horrible critiquer... (is that even a word? lol)

    Justin :D
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm....I like that. Ok, I will speak from my point of view, but may I ask if the book your reading had anything about Correllian Wicca, or just Wicca in general, because that's where I learned that, and I thought that was "pagan thinking", for lack of better words. As for the poem, it seemed a bit cynical, and sense I appreciate good cynicism, I had to agree. While I do believe that the soul does evolve to rejoin with the Gods when all lessons are learned an completed, I do NOT believe it's happening rapidly. And if it is, my sense of time is really warped, I have to say, because though I know a lot of wise people, I know some morons too. This poem touched on what a lot of people tip-toe around I think, about how humanity maybe is evolving as fast as we think it is, and were just kidding ourselves. I believe in a balance though, and I really strive to think that there are as many that are wise as there are that are well, just stupid. This poem was really great, and it hit some really good point. Awesome job.
    Walk in Love and Light,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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