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Make My Heart Your Home.

Author: James Reyna
Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 227 /166 /24
Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Make My Heart Your Home.

Make my heart your home
When your down
When you feel alone,
Like no one can hear
Here, take my heart
And I'll take your tears
And promise not to part.

Make my heart your home
I'll hold you close
Long after the storm has blown
And the chaos explodes
But if I hold your hand
Just remember this
My heart is always yours
As long as I live.

Submitted on 2006-07-18 18:50:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very romantic and sweet. You definately have a way of getting to the heart of the reader and you leave us wanting more :) I enjoy reading all your poetry...
| Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Pinkdaisy | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow this was a wonderful poem. I absolutely loved it. It was so amazingly sweet. I loved your
"And I'll take your tears
And promise not to part"
stanza. Those are some powerful words to me. It really shows how deep the love and caring goes. This was such a great peice of work. Such a sweet love poem. I loved it.
| Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is beautiful. Very well written. It's obvious from this that you are talking to someone you love a lot and you are welcoming them into your heart. I love peoms like this because they are all so very sweet and make me smile.
| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  i think there's a christian song like this...or just with a similar title....either way i liked it a lot. it's a comforting poem, very peaceful. with the Midnights Power poem....i'm not blood thirsty, i guess at the time i felt that way, but that was about three years ago. thank you so much for the comments. here in a second i'll put up a couple more recent poems that are more of how i am today i suppose.

shay marie
| Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]
  What a beautiful way James to welcome someone into your heart you are becoming a very wonderful poet my friend and your writings are maturing with each one that you write and it shows so please never stop writing because you do it so well this one you should be very proud of love it my friend. will add this one to my favs !!!!!!

| Posted on 2006-08-23 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  this is definitly a nice write i do like it whenever someone expresses themselves through writings such as this its refreshing,please look at some of my writes and comment on them not many people do so i dont know how they sound id realy appreciate it
the hidden one
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by thehiddenone | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and sweet, a little off on the rhyme but that didnt take away from the piece too much.

| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by AnotherNobody | [ Reply to This ]
  This is nice and simple.
It was written with feeling and intergrity, that much is I can tell. There is just one thing and that is the spelling error in the first line of the second stanza...I believe by hart you meant heart.
Thanks for sharing,
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
  This was written very well, the rhyme was a bit off though. I liked it alot, it was sweet simple, it portrayed much emotion, and it got the point across clearly. Great write. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading.

| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by heartofxwinterx | [ Reply to This ]
  I enjoyed this piece because it was eloquent yet minimalistic and reminded me of lovers in secret bonding their vow to each other. It had innocent and honest feeling and was very nice ~*~

Happy Day!

love,peace,joy&smiles to share
| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  These are very simplistic and would sound great as lyrics because they have a rhythm to them when spoken, and yes I spoke this to myself to see how it read, and it read well. I would suggest either expanding this or using it as lyrics to be sung over music. Hey Bernie Taupin was a great lyricist and wrote many great lyrics for Elton John to put with music. Lyricists have as much of my respect as poets do.
| Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]
  You said this very well
You showed us your true Heart and you held back nothing
I am glad we have become friends thru this site
It is rare to find a true Friend as honest as you
God Bless
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This is so sweet. And well written. It is short but to the point. Great piece. Keep writing.

| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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