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Hello Old Friend

Author: star_on_fire22
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Hmm, inspired by recent events. Hopefully eveythign will turn out fine...
Please, tell me your honest opinions. and if you can tell me where you think I need to improve or change things. Thanks.

Hello Old Friend

Hello old friend.
It's been a while.
I wonder if you even remember my smile?

When we last saw each other,
We were so young and naive.

Now we have grown up so much,
I can hardly believe it is you.

Do you remember all those days we played together?
All the laughs we shared?

I wonder,
Do you ever remember how much I cared?

I haven't forgotten all of your favorite things.
Nor the goofy things you loved to do.

Now you're in a band.
You have new friends, new favorite things and new things to do.

Can we still be friends like we once were?

Can we pretend all those years spent far from each other never occured?

Maybe we can just turn back the years,
back to when I left,

We can start off from there
so I never missed a step.

Submitted on 2006-07-19 03:18:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice to rember old friends that have move on. hopefully they will remember too! GBY! :)
| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]

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