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Author: Amberger
ASL Info:    13/f/earth
Elite Ratio:    1.9 - 49 /85 /24
Words: 104
Class/Type: Story /
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one day i
was walking
out to the
field at my
trailer with
a soccer ball
i was goin to
play soccer
and i saw one
of my good
friends so
we started talking
and he clasifies
himself as retarded
and i classify myself
as insane so
we made up
this word
intarded so we
went swimming
and we made
a corner
of the pool
and called it our
corner it is
marked too
if u see us together
u would
think that
we have known
each other
instead of
just a few weeks

Submitted on 2006-07-19 10:23:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ur story is good, but u should fix one part where it says "if you see us together you think that weve known each toehr for a long time" it should say "if you see us together you think weve known each other forever", i think it just sounds betetr, but it is a very well writen story

| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this poem because its about me, we're intarded lol and ur awesome;):)

-Nick- [aka] retarded
| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]

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